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Writing is a crucial part of learning in 2nd grade. As part of the core learning foundation of reading and math, writing improves with practice and is a significant part of a student's success in school and beyond. Writing every day is an important factor in a student's growth and learning as a writer.
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The Sharing assignment for the week of June 7-11 (2004) was a paragraph writing about our field trip to Edmonds Beach on Friday, June 4. Four students, Amanda A., Brittany K., Dylan T., and Alejandra J., gave permission to have their work shared online. Each was also quite willing to examine their paragraph further to see what could be done to their work to improve the paragraph and increase the level of score. See their writing below! |
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Link & Author |
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Summary |
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written by Amanda A. |
3 |
Amanda's paragraph has a good opening topic sentence and stays on topic. It has good supporting sentences in the body, and includes details and a good closing sentence. There are minor spelling and punctuation errors. It is well-organized, and the printing is neat and has good letter form and spacing. |
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written by Brittany K. |
3 | Brittany's paragraph has a good opening topic sentence and stays on topic. It has good supporting sentences in the body, and includes details and a fair closing sentence. There are minor spelling and punctuation errors. It is well-organized, and the printing is neat and has good letter form and spacing. |
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written by Dylan T. |
4 | Dylan's paragraph has a very good opening topic sentence and stays on topic. It has supporting sentences in the body with a lot of details, and a very good closing sentence. There are nearly no spelling or punctuation errors. This writing has strong voice in the language. It is well-organized, and the printing is neat and has good letter form and spacing. |
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written by Alejandra J. |
2 | Alejandra's first writing of her paragraph has a good opening topic sentence and stays on topic. It has good supporting sentences in the body, and includes details and a fair closing sentence. There are many spelling and punctuation errors. It is well-organized and the printing is somewhat neat and has mostly good letter form and spacing. |
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rewritten by Alejandra J. |
3 | Alejandra's second writing of her paragraph maintains a good opening topic sentence and stays on topic. It has good supporting sentences in the body with details, and now has a good closing sentence to improve on the writing. There are still spelling and punctuation errors. It is well-organized and the printing is mostly neat and has somewhat good letter form and spacing. |
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rewritten by Alejandra J. |
4 | Alejandra's third writing of her paragraph maintains a good opening topic sentence and stays on topic. It has good supporting sentences in the body, and includes details and a good closing sentence. There are now no spelling and punctuation errors. It is well-organized and the printing is neater and has good letter form and spacing. |
